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Mark Armstrong's avatar

Yer creepin' me out here, Chief!! πŸ˜¬πŸ’¦

Gotta cast my vote for the longer version-- it really ratchets up the tension and the claustrophobia.

And, of course, the stench when the heating's on... πŸ˜–πŸ’¦

Nice work, May, thanks for the chills!! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ₯ΆπŸ’¦

May More πŸ’œ's avatar

you got me laughing out loud Mark - which is jot an easy task atm! TY for commenting

Marie A. Rebelle's avatar

Such a painful ending. I love flash fiction stories where every word counts!

May More πŸ’œ's avatar

yes this one was a bit of a grubby story really - if u know what i mean lol

Krissy's avatar

Ooof you know my love for 100 word stories but I do like this version too.

Debdutta Pal's avatar

I prefer this one. But I like both. πŸ–€